Awaken Me
She walked outside the air sacristy quiet
The sky as black as a devils soul
Bulging heavy and foreboding
Sooty clouds churned and rolled
Buckling with aqueous weight
She hugged herself tight
Jutting her chin in brave defiance
As a cacophonous boom reverberated the night
Rupturing the tomb like silence
The atmosphere dense insistent
Heavens vault dragged open its rusty gate
Thundering angry clouds billowed and escaped
Lightening struck with silver tentacles bleeding into the land
One droplet splashed her face dripping a dirtless trail
Then a sheet of pinging needles collided into a heavy gale
As the feral sky spewed its spite against her and the adamant earth
Pools of water joined together rising over her feet
Surging through her toes the mud swirled and sucked
She stood still her feet rooted waiting her fate
The deafening downpour refused to abate
Lashing down in powerful urgency
Demanding acknowledgment no mercy
But on she stood her clothes drenched her fists clenched
A strangled cry escaped her she begged to feel
But all she saw were her sodden clothes she reeled
Turning back she went inside her empty house
To sit in the dark cavern of her loneliness and wait
Poem by Wendy Norman (Seafarrwide)
I have come back to read this one, now that I feel I understand your character a little better.
The first time I read it I was left speechless. I could not think I could add the the compliments you had already received. Now however, I can. I feel that you are describing a sentient being, whether this is within you or no, it is, what do you call them? An “absolute”, this person within this epic poem is coming to terms with the true nature of themself (him or her)
I often explore the many sides of my own dark and sinister character, this is similar in a lot of ways. To truly be human we must be ultimately evil and unequivocally good at the same time.
Well done for this piece, I will be sure to re-read and encourage others to read also.
HG
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Thank you, your words mean so much as I consider you so gifted in writing where I am just a beginner at expressing myself and my ideas. This poem came to me one night when I couldn’t sleep I tapped away on my phone while in bed as it was too cold to get up…I was cold inside somewhat too…:)
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Wow, I honestly don’t know where to begin. The imagery is just remarkable …
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Thank you so much! I wasn’t feeling well ate something too rich so couldn’t sleep and somehow this poem came out!
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It is so much fun to fall that deeply into your words … takes a lot to get me there. Fabulous 🙂
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Well I love reading your stories I get quite restless ha ha I appreciate your comments so much 🙂
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restless is good I think. 🙂 I sent you an email, lol
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Oh fab I must change the email account to this as I get hundreds of other emails not from here so I’m lazy in checking it!
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it doesn’t surprise me you get hundreds of emails … 🙂
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Ha ha they aren’t what you think just notifications unfortunately not many with words of admiration 🙂
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have I lost you ??
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Did you message again ?
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all good now … take care!
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Wonderful use of metaphorical descriptions, captures the experience of a storm so well. If I understand the last lines correctly, I have been in a similar place – despite one’s braving the elements of existence, one is still lost in a twilight zone of emptiness, aching to feel inspired once more…
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I’m so glad you understood the meaning of my poem and my feelings, thank you so much 🙂
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You’re welcome. If you are still in the midst of this – I trust that you will “feel” again very soon. Tender hugs.
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